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| Cynical Syndrome 2008-06-23 ch 1,  | abuseInteresting. I feel where your coming from actual see people like that in this area. They skin looks like hard leather and their body's show more bone then feature... C.S. |
| AK the Twilight 2008-06-08 ch 1, | abuse"Whoever dies first wins," is a line that really emphasized the facade and fakeness of modern day celebrity lifestyle. It's so false that I couldn't help but notice how in-your-face and cynical the song is. It's not entirely long, but it really gets the point across, all without losing much of the style and elegance your other poetry shows. This was an excellent achievement that describes the false world of celebrities well. Excellent job. |
| blacksunflower 2008-06-04 ch 1, | abuseA bit angry, isn't it? I'd say it sounds somewhat bitter, but maybe it's just me. A lot of the time, when I write, a lot of the words come from something that's happened to me before. But I do so love the lyrics, your word selection is fantastic and I like how you kept a pattern in the verses. Nice job! ~Helenn |
| Written 2008-02-27 ch 1, | abusehard hitting chorus there! also... "Starve a little, party a little, gag a little, die" very nice! has a good rhythm to it. the entire piece has great rhythm and feeling- it's awesome. |
| FoxyWriter 2007-10-25 ch 1, | abusewow...definitely tragic. It's true though, some people would do anything to be 'the top' of something, whether it be business, modeling, acting, or whatever. It's a sad and stupid truth x_X Vanity...vanity..vanity... Anyway, great work, written very well as all your work xD! ~FoxyWriter |