There's a spelling error in your summary. It's spelled "witness".

Not that I'm actually going to read this story. Your character sounds like a terrible Mary-Sue.

Uh that was quite a fresh and new way of narrating your story. So basically, is this story gonna state the events took place in between the 10th until the 11th of October?

And for the bold dialog in the start and end of this chapter, was Mar the one's who narrate how she died and became an angel? Sorry and forgive me for my blur-ness, or my incapable of interpret your meaning nicely.

Overall, I couldn't say it's good or what since this chapter was a bit short.

But your description was good enough itself. I guess readers could probably imagine and experience the pain just like how you portrayed it through first-person POV. Good work, and of course, keep it up dude (or perhaps girl?).

Hope it helps.

P/S : Let me guess. Is this account a combination or perhaps shared one among you and your fellow friends?