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Reviews For: The Addition on Tiny Beings

the face in the window
2007-10-22
ch 1,
abuseWith you there all the way. And I like the title, by the way. ^^

Rowan.
Oracle of Destiny
2007-10-19
ch 1,
abuseI agree with you 100 percent with what you're saying here. We need to do more things for this planet as we will pass it onto future generations.
The Grammar Nazi
2007-10-19
ch 1,
abuseI really like your essay; it provides several good points that many people today seem to have trouble with. If I may provide a couple points of constructive criticism: in an essay, it is important to keep your tone consistent unless there is an obvious emotional buildup of some kind. I would suggest reading it aloud to yourself to be sure that this is the case. Also, be careful about some of the points you make. If they are too broad, people will simply scoff at them and your point will be ignored. Be sure to hit the nail on the head, be specific rather than vague, and give examples wherever you can.

Overall, this is a very impressive essay, and I'm a rather difficult person to impress. Good job.
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