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| Thoughtful Silence 2008-04-03 ch 1,  | abuseWhoa, you've really captured that feeling of heartbreak within the confines of this haiku. I loved how the first two lines rhymed 'cause it's hard enough to create a haiku, let alone make it rhyme, and it gives this a unique spin. Good job! -Silence |
| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseHuh, wow, that was ...powerful... in three short lines. Reminds me of something I went through before; probably way different situation but I guess when people read poems, they all take it their own way. Really, amazing job. -stix- |
| Daughter of the Faeries 2008-01-25 ch 1, | abuseI felt that the image of the dagger was cliche, but I really admire how you managed to make a haiku rhyme. It also very effectively communicates what you meant to say in a very few words. Great job. Daughter of the Faeries |
| h20pologirl 2008-01-05 ch 1, | abuseI like it. Very powerful |
| Carousel Chorus 2008-01-03 ch 1, | abuseI love this, its brillaint! The emotions are just so raw and intense, amazing job. Unfortunately I Know the feeling. Thanks for the review! |
| smile for the sunshine 2007-12-28 ch 1, | abuseaw, that's so sad. i'm sorry. = ( i like your word choice. nice. = ) |
| Son Carmelya 2007-12-28 ch 1, anon. | abusenice... |
| Kenna-Kat11 2007-12-07 ch 1, | abusesimple but very powerful and it allows people to connect love it! ~E~ |
| windy girl 2007-11-07 ch 1, | abuseI got a feeling of jealously and even a little dread when I read this. Nice. :) -pb |
| Basara 2007-10-24 ch 1, | abusea cruel plot of love... nice... |
| vaudeville summers 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abuseVery lovely :) The use of italics is wonderful and I was surprised at the passion in such a short amount of words. ~Deanna |
| perpetual questions 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abuseI like that the last words of the first two lines rhyme. It makes the haiku unique. And the last line is good, as it leaves room for interpretation. Good haiku. |
| xDancingintheRainx 2007-10-19 ch 1, | abuseI can definitely relate. Very well written. I especially liked the last line. You've said so much and there's so much emotion in so few words and that really takes talent to make such an impact with such a short piece. Great job. |