love love love it! plz update soon!

the last two chapters were pretty good, but uhm, a little too much dialogue, maybe? i don't know. haha. but tyler sounds like a major hottie! XP

Well, to make this review worthwhile, the cons will approach you first and then the pros. So, brace yourself beforehand.

As you stated in your author's notes, it wasn't anything too amazing. I feel as if your story has potential, but it moves too fast in according to your main character. She looks like she's a spitfire, but she seems to go along with everything a little too much - something that seems like it's going against from what you described her in the previous chapter (and the chapter that I just read).

The second thing that I have to point out that your writing... it's young and a little bland to say the least. There aren't many words that describe your character and it simply points out that your character is somewhat like a teenaged girl that has issues with her rage issues. I would advise to add in a little more descriptive words in further chapters.

The last thing is that your writing seems to repeat, the one that seems to catch me is -
"your in all of my classes!"

"WHAT!?!" I lunged for my paper but he held it out of my reach. He chuckled.

"What is your name anyway?" I asked, managing to snatch my schedule away. He just smirked and leaned down and whispered,

"Tyler." I glared up at him and pushed him away, "Well what's your name?"

"None of your business!" I cackled waiting away from him. This 'Tyler' caught up with me quickly,

"Let me walk me to your homeroom."

"no."

"Well too bad."

"This isn't really walking- this is more like stalking." He shrugged.

"I don't care."

"woah WAIT!" I looked at my schedule, "your in all of my classes?"


That piece of dialogue annoyed me - did you intentionally made her repeat that or was that just an accident that you forgot to look over?

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PROS

I love the sense of humor Emily has. It's refreshing and puts a smile on my face of what wise-** comments she has to say to the poor boy.

The caps, where as it would be annoying to see, I think it fits Emily's character wonderfully.

The overall plot is interesting as well as it is humorous - I enjoy the tidbits where Emily rushes outside and kicks the car due to annoyance. Not every girl would have the nerve to do that (though I'm pretty sure that there are some girls that would)

Well, that's all to my review.

Love the story line! Update ASAP pls!

hehe update again soon. I love this story. love love love. Brilliant chapter and pervert pete should get kicked, it would be funny

kat.

i love this story by the way
cant wait for the next one/

ROFL! THIS STORY IS HILARIOUS!

Update soon ^^

The Emily thing is really confusing.

omg this story is so funny!

keep writing!!

Great laugh out loud bits, well done.
JM

love

OH! Me likey! Tyler sounds like a major hottie! I don't know how ong it's been since you've updated, but I think it's time for you to update! I wanna know what's gonna happen next!

It's pretty good overall but there are some minor grammar problems.

Lol, I like her already. Kicking the car. Wouldn't she get fired though? lol. Good intro though.

it's not crappy it's carrping halarious! I kinda thought that you had given up on the story. you know 'cause you haven't updated it in a while? But it rocks! I can't wait to see what happens next. Oh, does Jesse like the other Emily! OH OH OH!I bet that Emily 1 (Jesse's sister) had to cover for Emily 2 (...self explanitory considering what i said about Emily 1) because she was making out with Jesse! That would explain his red face! Oh awsome!! That's so cute!

CHRISTMAS IS ONLY 21 DAYS AWAY! I'll give you a virtual hug and hot cocoa with whipped cream, marshmellows, and cinnamon then okay? Bye Bye ^.^