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| x3life 2008-04-27 ch 1, | abuseaw this was cute =) |
| Jevanminx 2007-10-28 ch 1, | abuseSo cute and clever. I liked. JM |
| dOrKy-GuRl03 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseaw..haah...a scheme huh to figure it out the truth about the person if they have feeling for you or not?..interesting..i like it...that was a good shot or a story...hope that you will write more...bye..bye... |
| hiro0911 2007-10-25 ch 1, | abuseWow... it was... er.. VIVID Overuse of the word '**' (hehehe...) , but it was an entertaining read. I was never good in One-Shots. I can't write one-page stories. Take care, ~hiro0911 |
| Pop the Bubble 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abusethat was awesome =] i think the end was your strongest bit because the beginning - well just the last couple of lines in the first paragraph, could be a little more subtle, i think it was the anyway, "back to the story" bit. Maybe you could take that out and put something else, like make it a character flaw or something BUT i love this story! and i thought it was awesome! that was just that one bit that i thought was a little funny anyways hugs and kisses bubble |
| Altlover172 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseIt's cute! I like it! |
| starlit x sky 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abuseAw! That was really cute! I loved it, good job! |