heii i loved it it waz so cute

aw

aw this was cute )

So cute and clever. I liked.

JM

aw..haah...a scheme huh to figure it out the truth about the person if they have feeling for you or not?..interesting..i like it...that was a good shot or a story...hope that you will write more...bye..bye...

Wow... it was... er.. VIVID

Overuse of the word 'fuck' (hehehe...) , but it was an entertaining read.

I was never good in One-Shots. I can't write one-page stories.

Take care,

hiro0911

that was awesome ]

i think the end was your strongest bit because the beginning - well just the last couple of lines in the first paragraph, could be a little more subtle, i think it was the anyway, "back to the story" bit. Maybe you could take that out and put something else, like make it a character flaw or something

BUT

i love this story! and i thought it was awesome! that was just that one bit that i thought was a little funny

anyways

hugs and kisses

bubble

It's cute! I like it!

Aw!

That was really cute!

I loved it, good job!