|Reviews for Glass|
| A. Barone 5/7/08 . chapter 4
I like retellings, and I'm liking this one. But it's late and I have to go to bed. I'll read the rest later.
| l. fayette 3/15/08 . chapter 16
oh, progress. yay!
| Written 3/8/08 . chapter 1
wow, this looks like a great story! I'll read more after I get some sleep... I am SO tired. it's 3:00 am ish. D:
| akb-inactive 1/6/08 . chapter 15
Why does the beast seem so... I dunno, fake? Okay, fake is too harsh. But like, when he was 'feigning excitement', I felt bad... Haha! But nah, I think he's being genuine. He's just... confused, maybe?
AND OH MY GOD, I'M SLOW. But all these flashbacks of Imogene... some of them are based BEFORE they turned into monsters? Like the one in this paragraph? So maybe they did have sex, but... the kid is not his? And everyone just thinks it is because of Imogene's outburst in the party?
(Or maybe I'm just hoping this... haha)
Yeah, haha, sorta confused. But um, Beast must have really been in love with her...
And wow. Great story. It kept me interested from the beginning! DAMN! :D Most stories can't do that. :P
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 14
Oh, so Imogene was with some other person! Eh! And I'm confused, when you use Eirian or Cece as her name. :P
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 11
Aww, he sweeped the floor with his tail. And man, everyone's getting pregnant. Hahaha!
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 10
Um, I don't get how she could see him if she's blind? So some magical force is letting her see now?
Oh, something must have happened to Imogene? And man, it feels so sad right now. :(
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 9
Aw, it's nice Beast made a friend with the arm chair. But yeah, it's like a sad friendship. I felt so sad when the arm chair was like, she didn't mind fading anymore. :(
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 7
Oh, there's something in his pocket! :D A ring! A ring! But Oh God, he didn't get to propose!
Once again, the descriptions were wonderful in the end, when she was going to the castle. :P
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 6
oh, Bastien! Love! Haha!
Hmm... why is Cecilia a bad name? And aww, Bastien keeps thinking his grandfather is his true father. :P And yeah, Cece's pretty smart! :D
[He had grilled her over breakfast...]
Grilled? Hahaha, isn't that too slang-ish? :P
Also... hmm... maybe you could space out the paragraph more? Big blocks of text are disturbing. :P
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 5
Hmm... the whole threatening to stop the story if no one reviews is kinda getting annoying. :P
Okay, I know it's kinda mean for me to say this, but when I read the part where "Then you turn like this," I just laughed out loud. Hahaha, why would you say that to a blind person... ha... yeah.. me being mean. :P
[Imogene was still a sore spot for him...]
The term 'sore spot' seems so... modern and 20th century. :P
Oh, Isaac has so much knowledge bottled up inside. Gahh, but I wonder how Prince Bastien would react. What... news, what family history. Hahh
Oh, for some reason, I felt all tingly when Cece said that she recognized Prince Bastien as new in town because of his accent, I love it when writers use accents as a tool for foreign-ness. :D And I'm a sucker for Princes, so Prince Bastien is tugging at my heartstrings right now. :P
[but a promise made to anyone dying is a promise to be kept.]
Pfft. He forgot to name her properly! Pft! Haha
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 4
Oh man, the description in the beginning was awesome! The dream sequence? Way way way cool.
Wow, she can see in her dreams. That's something new, I haven't read that before with a story involving a blind person. Haha, and it's nice to read that her father is still pretty awkward with affection. :P
[But these dreams were a peaceful respite from her disconcerting, creepy nightmares.]
Haha, the word 'creepy' sorta disrupts the mood. Sorry, I'm picky with stuff like this because I really love, love the mood you have going for the story. :D
Hmm.. so she doesn't know what her father or anyone else looks like, right? Since she only see in her dreams... and she doesn't dream of anything else but castles and the servants in it? That part sort of confuses me.
[“Naw, you’re a classic, like my fried chicken. I’ll never get sick of you!”]
Aw! That makes me want to get married and have my husband say something like that to me. :D
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 3
Hmm... don't get too pushy with reviews, okay? :P Most people tend to get annoyed when writers are pushy. :P
[“What, she sways her hips just so when she moves? Trust me, with a belly that large, you’re sure to have a boy.”]
Hahha, that had me laughing. :P
And he didn't remember the name! What the! Jeez! The woman was dying, hahha! And so the baby is blind? Yikes... and he didn't bury the woman... so basically, her glass body is still there in his house. I dunno, it's very beautiful and all, but it is still sorta creepy. :P
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 2
Oh yeah, um, I forgot to say this for your first chapter, but maybe you could describe the angel a bit more? Not too much descriptions that it'll get all draggy... but maybe something to exemplify its divine power and stuff. :P
I love how the tinker is all "er..." when the woman starts bawling, haha, and how he's so awkward. :P
I love how you're very minimal in your sentences, but they're great, and get the action across. :P
Oh no, the glass is spreading!
What? she's pregnant!
| akb-inactive 1/5/08 . chapter 1
I tend to ramble and make pointless advice, but I'm reviewing as I go. :P
[This son’s name is long lost to the annals of history, but what is known about him was that he was spoiled, vain, and selfish.]
For some reason, the world 'spoiled' sort of ruins the whole... 'royal, ancient story-like' feel/mood to the paragraph so far. Maybe you could use another word that doesn't feel too... common/slang-ish, you know? Do you get what I'm saying? Hahaha :P
[His brother was practically king...]
The 'practically' sort of loses the whole feel/mood too. Haha, basically same case as above. :P
[...probably held her luggage.]
Same case as the above too. Maybe you could use the word... 'belongings' to keep the mood of the story flowing?
OH GOD, SHE'S HIS NEICE! Hahahaha!
So hmm... if my math's correct... their age difference isn't that far apart, right? :P
AND OH JEEZ! INCEST!
OH MY GOD. It's been a long time since I've read a fantasy story. To be honest, I tend to stay away from the fantasy section since a lot are so... dull and badly written. Great great great great job on this one! I love the whole glass hand part with the servant.