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| Thenardier 2008-03-11 ch 1,  | abuseThe last line seems rather unconventional, yet it blends in perfectly with the entire haiku. I don't know, but I feel extreme sadness in this haiku, and yet, a sense of profound hope. I like it. |
| Kusje 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseThe last line made the haiku more... placed, in a way, and yet, made me rethink what I read. The first two lines recall my thoughts about a type of sanctuary or hideaway place, and the use of 'heaven' really places that in. And yet, the last line integrated into it really made me think about it. 'Washed in a no-color dye' reminded me of something being bland or vague, possibly. Or maybe it's not colored? Great job at this :) |
| xDancingintheRainx 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseI really like this piece. Your word choice is perfect. I love the last line. Great job! Thanks for the review. I'm adding this to my favorites. |
| Basara 2007-10-24 ch 1, | abusea dream blooms in the place of clouds in one's mind... nice... |
| wordsworth in a garbage can 2007-10-20 ch 1, | abusequite beautiful. nice job. |