 Thenardier 2008-03-11 . chapter 1The last line seems rather unconventional, yet it blends in perfectly with the entire haiku. I don't know, but I feel extreme sadness in this haiku, and yet, a sense of profound hope. I like it. |
 Kusje 2007-10-27 . chapter 1The last line made the haiku more... placed, in a way, and yet, made me rethink what I read.
The first two lines recall my thoughts about a type of sanctuary or hideaway place, and the use of 'heaven' really places that in.
And yet, the last line integrated into it really made me think about it.
'Washed in a no-color dye' reminded me of something being bland or vague, possibly. Or maybe it's not colored?
Great job at this :) |