Hey, finally got round to sending you a review. No idea what fairy tale it is at the moment. I liked the first chapter as it made me wonder what was going to happen next. However, I got a bit lost in the second and third chapters- there is so much dialogue it could almost be a play maybe a bit more description of characters and location would be helpful? Also after all the interesting set up in chapter one I was expecting more linked to the dragon and so it was surprising that it changed to a school setting. Generally I think the ideas are good but it needs to be made a bit clearer to the reader.

Okay, I'll make this short. You have a lot of work to do.
You need a LOT more character development. By character development, I do NOT mean infodumps, but you need to bring the characters to life more.
Also, Eric seems a little too calm. I mean, if I was living a normal life and something like that happened to me, I would FREAK. And if he isn't leading a normal life, you need to show that. Also, you need more development about the setting. You shouldn't have to put details inside the author's notes. If they are important, they should be inside the story.

Hope and Cassandra's friendship is pretty cute lol

Short chapter so i don't got much to say... BUT KEEP IT UP :D

Someday your going (or somebody) to need to explain quantum to me ok?

I'm getting excited

w00ts i loves it

The explanations provided by the chapter do little to outweigh the questions raised. However, your note at the end helped a lot.

It's all very interesting, I think. The possibilities are endless, it seems (too endless perhaps,) and the setting sounds pretty neat.

Still no clue what fairy tale it is.

There are still a lot of things I'm unclear on, but I'm hoping they get explained as we go. Example... what's a fair head? It's popped up in multiple chapters, but with still no explanation.

A groggy call, but with an exclamation point? You might reconsider one, or the other.

Again, it's all dialogue. Thankfully, you do dialogue well, I'd like to know more and without waiting for the elusive chapter seven.

In the last line, you make it sound as if Hope knows that they are goingt o the hidden mansion. Maybe he does, but I didn't think so.

First sentence, consider making it two, or rewording it by adding an 'and' where the comma is.

Couple spelling errors (crocked is one I remember seeing,)
and slitted isn't a word.

I still can't believe there's no chapter seven... it better be coming soon.

I really need chapter seven.

It sounds really intriguing though. I'm guessing (note - guessing - because it's not quite clear)that Hope sort of created an illusion for Eric.

If not, then I really have no idea what the heck is going on.

It wasn't too terribly gory though.

Third chappie, actually...

Ok, it's possible you did mean fairhead... I don't know cuz there's no chapter seven to explain everything! :)

Well, I have this to say so far. This seems like it could be an interesting story. I still have no idea about what fairy tale it could possibly be.

Everythings is dialogue, for the most part. Why is that? It would be nice to have a better idea of this really modern -almost futuristic- setting.

No guess about the fairy tale, but I'm not too knowledgeable about them anyhow. What I do know is that this was a bit confusing, especially the last few lines. Silvernette... is that like a brunette, only silver?

Hmm... a few things. First, there is no chapter seven. Second, what exactly about a dark puddle is proof to Hope that there was a dragon there? Third, you said, "Mom wants me ... for school," the fair head said softly. I don't think you meant the fair head...

wow COol i can't wait to see what happens. and er is Hope a guy?