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cup of glee and sparkles 2008-04-07 ch 6,	abuseAw, I really like this story! You have a few problems with typos or awkward wording (like, most people say "I'm" not "I am") but other than that, really good. Drea's my absolute fave, and I want to know a lot more about her and about Justin. Um... oh yeah, the italics as Shane's thoughts are a bit weird. I also heart Jackie! So, update soon!
SummerBaby94 2008-02-10 ch 6,	abusehaha. i like the ending!
Tecna 2008-02-09 ch 6,	abuseYay! You've finally updated. I told you the chapter will come to you and it's a fantastic one as well! I loved reading this chapter, especially where Ral was in trouble and great punishment btw! I really can't wait to see what happens next, I know it will be awesome, so I hope you update soon! Will be waiting for it! Tecna ;)
redblackkittycat 2008-02-09 ch 1,	abuseIn reply to your question, I believe Raleigh is different because she doesn't try and fit into a clique, but befriends different sorts. Most female leads tend to be either 'emo/punk' or 'popular'. To an extent, her other friends are more cliché, fit into different genres of people, but at least you try and break some of the stereotypes: e.g. an intelligent cheerleader, a bookworm that can have girly, "ditsy" moments (just a note: 5'3" is not a midget! Sorry, it's just I'm that height and although I'm short, I know shorter people)!. I also like, after re-reading a bit of your story, the fact you described brown eyes as cold and steely, it's a nice touch. Shane seems to also break stereotypes of a Jock, although more needs to be known to make a proper judgment. I hope that answers your question.
redblackkittycat 2008-02-09 ch 6,	abuseThis story is OK, it's written differently than others and the characters are slightly different. Bonus points for making your main character not an abused orphan, just a 'normal' one. However, you do need to check typos, spelling, grammar. Also try to avoid being too repetitive, as you say 'whatever' a lot for example. Also, adding the thoughts of Shane at random in a different perspective (3rd instead of 1st person) was annoying and threw me a bit. It would have been better to extend it and put it in the first person in a seperate chapter. It would look better and allow more detail about Shane. I understand you want to make him a little mysterious, why can't he fancy/date Raleigh?, but you can maintain it without sudden style changes. But overall alright.
-pixidust-princess- 2007-11-30 ch 5,	abuseOh my god! I love shane, he is so cute! when do we find out who the secret letter person is? please update soon!
SummerBaby94 2007-11-20 ch 5,	abusegosh, raleigh really is oblivious. she really needs to realize shane likes her... actually now that i think about it, if shane didn't promise some unknown person that he would stay away from her, or something along those lines, they'd most likely be together... oh wait... i wonder if the unknown person is nick! =0
stargazerlost 2007-11-20 ch 5,	abuseOh how cute is that, he was speechless or sort of. Hm I wonder what that promise thing was all about. Haha poor her, having to wear a dress to school. I wonder what's going to happen next.
Tecna 2007-11-20 ch 5,	abuseHe had promised who? You've added suspense now, if a cliffhanger wasn't enough. Anyway, great ending, it was funny the way you finished the chapter. Brill chapter btw, I can't wait to read more. Btw, you're a quadruplet? I've never seen or met any before and I still don't understand as to what's bad about having a sister. (Not that I have one or anything, got two bros, younger than me.) Update soon, can't wait to read more. Tecna ;)
disgruntled female 2007-11-20 ch 5, anon.	abuseWho did he promise? WHO DID HE PROMISE? (gasp!) Was it Nick? Did he promise Nick something? But then WHAT did he promise? ARGH! I'm so confused... my poor brain... Oh, and next time, DON'T TAKE FOR FREAKING EVER TO UPDATE! Please and thank you!
TuttiFruttiOXOX 2007-11-20 ch 5,	abuseI usually don't go for stories like this, the ones that seem a little "highschoolmelodramatic," if you know what I mean, but this is really intriguing. I'm in study hall. So I had to keep myself from shouting out when I got to the end of the fifth chapter. I like it. I am VERY intrigued and it's holding my attention so that's good :) Wish to read my stories by any chance? Kat
TabzChewy 2007-11-20 ch 5,	abuseAw, what a sweet chapter =) It seems like Shane's character might have changed a little (Or maybe it was just b/c you were going more in depth with his character?)
SummerBaby94 2007-11-16 ch 4,	abuseaw. that ending has to hurt.
Tecna 2007-11-11 ch 4,	abuseSorry my review is late, been busy. And I agree with your sisters, it is a cliff-hanger, I despise cliffhangers, you have to update asap. That leaves us readers in so much suspense, it's not nice. But overall, fantastic chapter, absolutely love the story, it's brill. Update soon! Tecna ;)
Clare 2007-11-10 ch 4, anon.	abuseIm really enjoyin this story! They were friends?! How could she not remember tht?! I kinda agree with your sisters there, I mean it is a bit of a cliff hanger! PLEASE UPDATE SOON! :)

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