first i was going to sleep im 8 years old and at midnight i hade a nigtmare so i shoutide help! so i woke back up and tryed to stay awake and i just fell back to sleep then i woke back up and i stade awake

The last line made me giggle quietly. I had a similar experience just last night...
A short, simple piece with very concise wording. Good in its own right, but I feel you could do better if it was expanded.
Though the subject matter is widely used, you do not bring cliches, you bring something all your own.
-J.A.
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I like the flow of this piece. Its short and simple, but it has so much impact. Well done. Thanks for the review.

Short, simple, and great. I'd love it if you expanded that into a longer poem, but it works as is also.