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| siphoned afterglow 2008-02-17 ch 1,  | abuseBeautiful. and very captivating. The way you expressed the way you feel is truly amazing. A mix of faint bitterness and dissapoinment and something like hope emerging out of it. wonderful. *favorites* |
| essenceflower 2007-11-07 ch 1, | abuseI didn't like the format and the way you broke up the sentences/words, but I liked the topic and the way you portrayed it. |
| Tytherpol 2007-11-01 ch 1, | abusemy sister told me yesterday that i should get glasses/braces/etc so i would look like a nerd. that way, she said, i would fit in somewhere b/c people would know who i was--a nerd. i told her i believe i already pretty much am one already, but she said i am not...i'm just smart, she said. if i had the look, people would see me as a nerd and stop questioning what's up with me. i told her i didn't want to labeled as anything. then i asked her what a revolutionary looks like. "there isn’t any revolution that wants/me/to be a part of it,/but maybe there’s an uprising, or a river/to cross,..." --i love this part a lot. and "eloquently circular and//fingernail thin, like our/assurances have grown." says a lot and sets a great tone. nice job on this. |
| review 2007-10-23 ch 1, | abuselots of paradoxes, awesome imagery...profound poem overall. great expression of emotion and separation of stanzas. creativeness reigns in your poem, and it aint bad at all. |
| the face in the window 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abuse"So write this in the/ starlight/ in whatever ink you can find or create,/ because in the end if anything/ matters it isn’t what lasts but what/ we make of what never will." You are a breaktaking poet, you know that? Rowan. |
| painted.music 2007-10-21 ch 1, | abusekonban wa "because in the end if anything matters, it isn't what lasts but what we make of what never will." - My favorite line(s) of the whole poem. This was an interesting style, one I don't remember seeing before. I liked how you utilized it in that way -- the way you broke up the sentences, etc. :) I was wondering -- that line I mentioned -- can I add it to my quote book (with credit given to you, of course). I won't unless given permission, but I really hope you say yes. :P Zaijen -Shan- |