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| Metalic 2008-05-10 ch 14, | abuseThis is the second time I've read this story (I followed it once while it was still being updated and then thought on it and went to read it again) and I have to say that I find it unbelievable that you haven't gotten hundreds of reviews right now. If you look, I have over forty stories on my favorites list and even more on my alerts and this is one of the best I've ever read! Most stories I enjoy as much as I have this one have received thousands of reviews, so I don't know what the hell is wrong with the readers, maybe they all just have bad luck and missed out on finding this amazing work! There were a lot of typos, grammar mistakes and such, but none of which made it hard to understand the story, none of which broke the flow or crippled the beautiful style of writing you have. So again, I'm at a loss as far as why you haven't received more reviews. So, even though I'm usually lazy with this type of thing, I decided that I was finally going to give back to you for writing this story that I'll probably read multiple times in the future. Set is just the most adorable (I mean... handsome) thing! Especially when he's little in the flashbacks and such, and of course, the beginning. I think over all the prologue is my favorite part of the story, it just adds to everything so much and during the whole time I was reading (knowing from the moment it was revealed that this Lucas had blond hair, that he was Li) just kept thinking back to that in my sub-conscious. The timing for everything is so perfect, the characters are so lovable, even the ones with smaller parts like Chris. I just feel like I could just go on and on about it and I would but at the same time I'm at a loss for words having just finished it for the second time. I love how they tease each other in the end and... scratch that, I love the ending. Period. It's the kind of ending, and the kind of story all together that just makes me smile no matter what kind of mood I'm in. The kind I'll keep thinking about for the rest of the day after reading it. It's just so amazing, and thank you SO much for writing and posting it on FP! |
| Apiffany 2008-05-08 ch 14, anon. | abusei know u like finished ages but i thought i should let u know how much i LUV it! um, i dont realli giv constructive reviews so sorri i kant help u in that aspect but 10,0 points out 2 u! aniwais luverly ending and luverly ending i hope u keep writing and never let anibodi tell u ur not good cause u total rule i'll keep an out 4 more! xoxoxoxxox |
| sicca-chan 2008-04-06 ch 14, | abuseHey hi! Great story! I like the way the story was written.Centered on Set with a background story without deep details. It makes the story lighter. Furthermore, the flashback was not to heavy. There's a good balance between the "present time" and the "past". (well, hum...I'm trying to give you constructive review, but well..i'm no too good at it. xD) Anyway, I really like your story. ^ ^ I love your characters. =3 |
| Daemon S. S. 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseWow, that's really good so far. I'll have to read more since I'm at school and all but other then that it's really good! ~Daemon |
| apiffany 2008-03-27 ch 13, anon. | abuseme luvy ur story its so cute ...sigh... u totalli deserve more reviews i giv u a thousand points! toodles darling xoxoxoxoxoxox |
| The youngen 2007-11-28 ch 5, | abuseReally great story. Love the characters. |
| Esquirella 2007-10-31 ch 4, | abuseSeems like Lucas neatly manuevered Set into his house. |
| Lil'minx 2007-10-29 ch 4, | abuseGood story, update soon! |
| Esquirella 2007-10-22 ch 3, | abuseInteresting story! |