sad piece and very well done.. I love the formatting.. you can definitely feel the emotion in the piece and the feather simile was great although I might consolidate it a bit it seemed a bit repetitive... I would combine the 5th to last line and second to last line into something like I let the feather go just like you.. the other thing I really loved was the feeling nothing part.. that was pwoerful

Wow! I like alot. Anyway keep up the good work. I honestly enjoy and i keept up reviweing.

Mandi4life

Loverdream17

thank god neither of us will have to experience this...no way in hell would i ever let this happen

you aint gettin rid of me that easily :)

Oh-so good. Just the type of poem I like. I have no constructive criticism right now, afraid that any advice I could give you would shatter the delicacy of the piece.

Deanna