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| stardustfaery 2008-03-17 ch 1,  | abuseyay for independence! I hate, absolutely abhor stereotypes or labels of any kind and this does very well of telling of the expected mold for every girl to look like. |
| Blissfully Sarcastic 2007-10-29 ch 1, | abuseI like it, but the last stanza was a little choppy. Maybe move I'm more than down a line. And you talk about your hair a little too much... {By you, I mean the narrator--seeing as it's told in first person.} Other than that, it's pretty darned good. ^^ |