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| the Stranger in the moonlig... 2007-10-25 ch 1, | abuseThis was breathtakinlg entrancing and well spun. It gives an almost sneer to the said man who is all alone... "head them my quest is forlorn" the head should be "heed". Good story... ~the Stranger in the moonlight |
| the face in the window 2007-10-23 ch 1, | abuseFiction?!? Wow, this is amazing. You should write more of this style. Did this really happy? Rowan. |
| painted.music 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abusekonban wa I definitely think you should continue and turn this into a story. My favorite part was the style: present tense is often difficult to write well -- not to mention many people forget and keep switching tenses. You writing here is excellent! I can't wait to hear more from this story. :) Zaijen -Shan- |
| Core Satiated 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abuseLoved the concept, enjoyed the story and my favorite thing about this was the way that happiness is presented in perception. The depth is phenomenal. You never disappoint. |
| EmoDefier 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abusevery philosophical and sophisticated. i particularly like the style in which it's written. one thing i don't like though, is that it's a little cliche. otherwise, very good job, i really like it. |
| Butterfly Masquerade 2007-10-22 ch 1, | abuseI love the imagery and the seemingly mundane topic that you've brought life to. |