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painted.music 2007-10-26 ch 1,	abusekonnichi wa Oh wow, this is... I love this. "She just called me an eem-bee-sill." -- I like the naive sound of this... of the child sounding out the word. It was incorporated very well into the poem. It reminds me of the types of poems I started to write when my cousin was deployed to Quwait -- Daddy dying and people left behind. But mine are mostly different because they don't have the abuse part in there, too. At least the most recent one I wrote about this topic (You'll Come Back) doesn't. I don't think the others do either. But that's so off topic. "Wake up and get out of that stupid box" was also a brilliant line. It just drove the point further of the child not understanding. Beautiful. truly amazing. Zaijen -Shan-
the Stranger in the moonlig... 2007-10-25 ch 1,	abuseThis hurt me to read, its so sad and I have to say it oughta be rated higher... even if she is just a little girl... cries ~the Stranger in the moonlight
softer side of apples 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abuseWOW! THIS POEM IS WELL WRITTEN BUT IT GIVES ME A SENSE OF SADNESS...
Lexiadis 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abuseVery good, but tragically sad. I know three kids that when they lost their dad there mother started abusing them so this really hits home.
ten pts above average 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abuseaww this breaks my heart.