hey BRK tis CGE, well my cousin I have read this and its quite good. I went shopping today, I dont think I'll be able to see you this weekend srry. but i got the cutest pair of boots! OMG! they're all midevilish. lol i LOVE them! well my cousin got a look and would like to comment through me soo.. here she Is RAW!

Hey! Just for good old times, I would like to say 'your face' and 'your elbow is rapeing me'. Good times...*thinks back and giggles to self*. I was reading your poem, madness. And i have to say, it is truely a work or art. FABOULOUS! UTTERLY FABULOUS! Its a wonderfully morbid poem. I hope you can keep this up for many years and never quit. I cant wait to read your other stuff. You are such a better writer then me. Me and you must keep in touch. You can catch me at I know its old and geeky, but i cant change it because it would be to hard to start over. Anyways i have a myspace if you have one? But just incase Well i think thats it...hopefully. I hope to see you soon. I would love too chat with you too. So, email me or somthing.
~much love

Well done. I really enjoyed that. Thought provoking and obviously quite dark.

I'd say that a couple of the rhymes are a little contrived, especially where you cut a phrase in half to create the rhyme you want. Still, I only noticed a couple of occasions where you did that, and anyway, the rhythm makes it easier to deal with than if it had been a straight poem.

Anyhow, good job!

Benedict

Wow, that was an amazing, powerful, did I mention amazing poem? It's really good, nothing wrong with it, practically perfect! I really like this poem. :)