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Reviews For: Missing Muse

TylerB 2007-12-07 ch 1,	abuseI liked how the last two lines of the first stanza rhymed, giving it a complete kind of full cirlce flow (if that makes any sense...) But I was dissapointed that you only did that on the first stanza. None the less, it was still beautifully desciptive, and (as always) an aesthetically pleasing read.
fictitious facades 2007-11-02 ch 1,	abusevividly descriptave; really well done.
Faithless Juliet 2007-10-30 ch 1,	abuseI really enjoyed the repitition of 'please' the overall feel of this piece was amazing. And your detail was striking, so many amazing images. I really enjoyed this piece. Keep up the good work. Much love, Juliet.
DiaRose 2007-10-26 ch 1,	abuseAmazing. So unique, it really impresses me. Love, ~Dia
the Stranger in the moonlig... 2007-10-24 ch 1,	abuseThis was thrilling in an exotic and poetic way. Just wonderful inspired read. I loved the beginnings with "please" and then the denial of asking what you wish, it gave the poem wonderful flow. ~the Stranger in the moonlight
Stella Grimshaw. 2007-10-24 ch 1,	abuseThis poem was so sad, it's so hard to lose yourself
the face in the window 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abuseThis is really pretty. I can totally relate. Another beautiful write. Rowan.
painted.music 2007-10-23 ch 1,	abusekonban wa I loved this. adds to favs The imagery was absolutely beautiful. "braiding each strand into a copper necklace," "paint sunflowers down her back," "(i'm proving my insanity," etc. Speaking of that last line -- you forgot the end parenthesis. Just thought I'd mention it. Also, in the fourth stanza, fourth line, you wrote, "slowing" instead of "slowly." At first "Slow[ly] feeling inside of me" sounded sexual, but I got what you meant after I read the rest of the stanza. It still sounded a bit awkward because of the connotation of the words, though; so perhaps you'd like to change that. Then again, that might have been your desire, in which case shrug. Zaijen -Shan-

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