Yay! The "hero" died! I'm so tired of those fairy tales where they "save the day" three million times.

Okay, enough said. Regarding your writing, I think it is really good. As I read it, I found it to be very catchy. I just noticed one very minor thing. Hope you don't mind.

"They each sought something difference, that in part"

Do you mean "They each sought something different, that in part..."

It's just that. Otherwise, everything is very perfect. Thanks for your review of my story in the last chapter. I've updated, so if you are interested, do take a look at it and give me some feedback if you have time.

Thanks for the nice writing. Keep it up!