Reviews for Living for the End

Reviews For: Living for the End

Otaku42 2007-11-08 ch 1,	abuseInteresting set-up. I like the idea of showing the main character's daily routine, to help show how much it will be drastically changed- I have yet to read beyond this chapter, though, so I can't give any assumptions as to how the story will play out. The opening also really helped develop the character for me, and the phrase "desk-shaped coffin" made me grin. Keep it up! ~Otaku42
Imalefty 2007-11-07 ch 2,	abuseaw this is so cute! i thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. :) it had just the right amount of description and summary, you got into her head perfectly and introduced him well. i like the balance between realism and fluff - too much of either is a bad thing. good job! nothing i see at the moment. great second chapter! -Lefty
Shlugit 2007-11-07 ch 2,	abuseshe counts. she kind of scares me. again with the breaks. by the way, where is this story taking place? i need to put it into perspective.
Imalefty 2007-11-06 ch 1,	abusenice intro - you've set up your main character and alluded to the rest of the plot. :) "'good morning, miss graham,' her assistant greeted." - "greeted" at the end is a little awkward... perhaps "greeted her." also, you might want to mention her name is allison - when you first mentioned her name, i was a little confused as to who it was... although i wouldn't normally like so much detail, the end (about her meals) is very good - it shows the repetition in her life. :) good job so far! keep writing! -Lefty
soojinyeh 2007-11-03 ch 1,	abuseDesk shaped coffin-the girl is kinda pessimistic. Her life does seem kinda dull, though. Can't wait to see who this Collin is and what exactly he does.
Shlugit 2007-10-25 ch 1,	abuseso many parts of me told me that this was going to be a one-shot. apparently not... anywho, i have no idea where this was going, and i was almost looking forward to a suicide at the coffin-desk. feedback, feedback. i'm getting there. as for my attempt at correcting grammar, i am an abuser of the comma, and feel like there should have been several added in the dialogue. between the two scenes (at the desk and at the meeting) i kind of feel like the transition was too vague. i also feel that's how you meant it to be, but i had to go back and double-check to make sure that it was a completely different time. damn. this girl's got problems. where does it go next?

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