Interesting set-up. I like the idea of showing the main character's daily routine, to help show how much it will be drastically changed- I have yet to read beyond this chapter, though, so I can't give any assumptions as to how the story will play out. The opening also really helped develop the character for me, and the phrase "desk-shaped coffin" made me grin. Keep it up!

~Otaku42

aw this is so cute!

i thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. :) it had just the right amount of description and summary, you got into her head perfectly and introduced him well.

i like the balance between realism and fluff - too much of either is a bad thing. good job!

nothing i see at the moment. great second chapter!

-Lefty

she counts.
she kind of scares me.
again with the breaks.
by the way, where is this story taking place?
i need to put it into perspective.

nice intro - you've set up your main character and alluded to the rest of the plot. :)

"'good morning, miss graham,' her assistant greeted." - "greeted" at the end is a little awkward... perhaps "greeted her."

also, you might want to mention her name is allison - when you first mentioned her name, i was a little confused as to who it was...

although i wouldn't normally like so much detail, the end (about her meals) is very good - it shows the repetition in her life. :)

good job so far! keep writing!

-Lefty

Desk shaped coffin-the girl is kinda pessimistic. Her life does seem kinda dull, though. Can't wait to see who this Collin is and what exactly he does.

so many parts of me told me that this was going to be a one-shot. apparently not...

anywho, i have no idea where this was going, and i was almost looking forward to a suicide at the coffin-desk.

feedback, feedback. i'm getting there.

as for my attempt at correcting grammar, i am an abuser of the comma, and feel like there should have been several added in the dialogue.

between the two scenes (at the desk and at the meeting) i kind of feel like the transition was too vague. i also feel that's how you meant it to be, but i had to go back and double-check to make sure that it was a completely different time.

damn. this girl's got problems.
where does it go next?