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| thats-unfortunate 2008-08-16 ch 1,  | abuseHey Ravon, I hope you decide to update this again sometime. I was really looking forward to how you were going to continue it. Hope you find the motivation again for Avery and Ayah. Take care. - Kayla. |
| zomgnessa 2008-07-27 ch 12, | abusei think you need to update =] this story is too good for you to just leave it there for that long =] update update update |
| plumblossom 2008-07-27 ch 12, | abuse_let me know what you think og the boys_ I like them. I keep expecting more repercussions from their respective pasts, though -- especially for Ayah. You've set up a possibility for real social turmoil with his ex and his ex-friends. It's sort of a letdown when he reconciles so easily with the one friend and dismisses Jake so easily. And Avery's former lifestyle could easily come back to bite him -- those people he texts? Wouldn't they be giving him more grief? I can see that Avery's relationship with his mother is a ticking bomb -- did the explosion just start? Do please update soon. |
| aesthetic.rainbows 2008-05-27 ch 12, | abuseyou're just going to end it there? Never let us know what hapens? NO. It's such a good story and you're such a good writer, i hope you decide to pick the story up agian soon. I really enjoyed reading it and cant wait to find out what happens. |
| Sasquatch 2008-04-07 ch 12, | abuseso curious on what's gonna happen next! |
| WTF OMG STFU 2007-11-30 ch 12, | abusehey! like oh em gee I love this story more then anything. You are an amazing writer and like..wow... Avery and Ayah are so cute together. I really liked this chapter! The ending was like, WHOA! lol. It's in amazing story. Please post more soon or I will cry... =[ |
| just give me november 2007-11-30 ch 12, | abusee, i like this story. i wondered when they were going to get caught... lol. i read this all at once, kind of. i'm in my chemistry class and it's boring :| anyway! i don't think i have any suggestions... uhm. yeah. |
| Jessika 2007-11-29 ch 1, anon. | abuseI'm sorry but this story just seems like every other fan girl slash story out there these days. I couldn't even get through the first chapter because it was like reading the same thing over and over again. Try and spice it up when you revise or maybe you will in newer chapters. |
| summerxsteps 2007-11-29 ch 12, | abuseRavon Ladyy; This chapter was amazing, despite the fact that you think otherwise. Gah. I really like how you ended it, even if it's making me want to beg for more. Ayah and Avery are very realistic, and you do a great job at bringing them to life. I love you, and I love this story, and by the looks of it so do tons of other people. Keep it up lady. |
| Painted Desert 2007-11-25 ch 11, | abuseOh! I love this chapter. Avery is just adorable and I love the roles that both of the boys have kind of fallen into. I love the protective and motherly ( |
| mia5081 2007-11-25 ch 11, | abuseYes! Ayah punched Jake *does a little dance* That made me very happy lol Update soon! ~Mia |
| Anonymous 2007-11-24 ch 11, anon. | abuseI normally don't go for the whole step brother thing and have been sidling away from slash lately from the rampant amount of misogyny, but this story's a breath of fresh air. Glad to see a good slash where -all- the characters are developed. |
| Kamiko-Miha 2007-11-24 ch 6, | abuseI didn't even think about the parents...this chapter makes Avery seem more human. Great job ^^ |
| Kamiko-Miha 2007-11-24 ch 5, | abuseI was wondering where that popsicle stick went. |
| Iizolda 2007-11-22 ch 10, | abuseI'm glad you updated so quickly:) !Party's coming! LoL |