 felicia13 2007-10-28 . chapter 1Oh my god. I'm actually crying. That was so sad and part of it's because it's true and it happens everyday and the other part is the way you described it.
The only CC I can offer is the make the first paragraph a little clearer. I thought it was going to happen... and then it did. But your words get a little smushed together in the beginning. That's it.
Beautifully written. I can't say anything else about this. It's amazing, the way you did this without actually saying what it was straight out.
Felicia. |