Tasteful, true, you bring my thoughts to life,
it's like what happens when you go numb.
"Your lungs are hemorrhaging."
And at that point you just can't detect emotion, the imagery is there, it's like the reader lies bleeding in your life, in your eyes and neither detects any emotion.
Perfect follow-up line: The words are sterile and shrink wrapped.

This poem burns with your eyesight, your memory. I'm not sure if his lungs were what bled.. but one of my oldest guy friends I met and got to know by helping him clean up his blood, fresh from his coughing mouth. I thought right then and there from that moment on only how beautiful he looked yet how sad as he wiped his bloodied smile clean. We connected over his spilled blood...

There is indeed, more than one good way to drown.
;p thanks for the reference to Plath

oh my, based off something true? Well i hope all turned out for the best anyways. Beautifully done, the style is amazing, making it flow yet each line stands out on its own at the same time. Good work in my humble opinion. ^.^

~*~Angelfacekrys~*~

this is so beautiful
i abosutuly love the stanza

i cough.
blood stains my lips like red dye # 2.
it tastes like life wasted.


agh your amazing

wow, i love it! keep writing

I am definately missing a part of this, but what I do understand, or at least persume to, I like. Nice poem.

O Sylvia.

vivid.. memorible.. unreal...

i never thought to think beyond what is typically known..

Sabes

Wow, what a great opening line. I'm a sucker for medical terms, if you can call it that. Nice. :)

-pb

thanx fot the review actually i dont have much time now so i´m glad that you gave me a review that lead me to your work and i have to say "girl, is awesome" the way you put these words it feels like you bleed every letter...if you know what i mean.

good work.

This world is ((In State Of Agony))

Omg...beautiful.
I loved this...excellent job.

I like how lips taste, and how blood has flavour. Quite a refreshing poem~ xD

Thanks for the review, anyway ^^

Absolutely amazing.

I really like the last line.

"blood stains my lips like red dye # 2."

I love this piece. Very powerful and your descriptions are so original. It's brutal and elegant at the same time. The look of the poem works well with the actual words.

I've been meaning to ask, is your new pen name a reference to Sylvia Plath Syndrome?

O_O I love your poems. Please keep writing. And thank you for the review.