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| My Atomic Garden 2008-07-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is a very powerful piece and I liked the format very much. You did a very good job proof-reading which, contrary to popular belief, does matter. My favourite line: "You wear your scars like jewelry, with no explanation to where you got them or how much you paid." it shows that every slice has a cost, but that is so easy to ignore and it is just a beautiful line. Nice metaphor with the puppets... -Peace out. It's the Review Marathon weekend (link in profile)! |
| xfail 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseThis was incredible. I've had some experiences like this myself, and it's always interesting to see what others say about it. You did an excellent job in conjuring up all these emotions, and not once did I feel that you strayed far from being realistic. This is a very well-written piece. |
| Undrahas 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseThis was really good, and I found nothing wrong. |