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| fairytale failure 2008-04-24 ch 6,  | abuseI really like this chapter, especially the repetition of gun. The last four lines were my favourites. |
| Let It Rain 2008-02-02 ch 1, | abuseThis is ... amazing. All of it, but particularly the first stanza and the line "her eyes speak ages of sly." It makes me think of shifty eyes and James Bond movies (with powerful female counterparts, of course). ... Reading over it again... yeah, it's pretty much very incredible. |
| Smoky Bear 2007-12-03 ch 3, | abuseman she's such a harlot, lol. this is marvellous glimpse into this girl's life, it's cool. hope ya keep writing it :-) |
| Smoky Bear 2007-12-03 ch 2, | abusethat's gorgeous. like a whole beat-movie unravelling through the words. she's tangible... i feel like i'm with her every step of the way. |
| mezzie 2007-11-30 ch 1, | abusefantastic. the repetition sits lovely on the tongue, feeling like someone is whispering it in my ear... -mezzie |
| Smoky Bear 2007-11-25 ch 1, | abusevery intriguing read. really cool poem. |
| I.O.K.O 2007-11-09 ch 1, | abuseI am gunslinger professional, yes? |
| Guardrail 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is was a really interesting read. I love the rhyme scheme in the beginning and the rhythm throughout was great! Awesome imagery here too. I really like this one a lot. Keep writing! |
| Faithless Juliet 2007-10-31 ch 1, | abuseI truely loved the repititon of 'sly' in this piece, it's such a flirty, sasy, yet dark and deceptive work - complex, like real women always are. Wonderful work, keep it up. Much love, Juliet. |
| she smolders 2007-10-30 ch 1, | abuseThe word "sly" is such a gorgeous one and I don't think I have appreciated it enough 'til now. |
| Moondog Dozier 2007-10-28 ch 1, | abuseThis has a very interesting mixture of sound and pacing. I like how the sound usage is deliberate and constructed in such a way that lines lead into lines effortlessly from an audible standpoint. Very well written. MD:77. |
| Imaginary Strangers 2007-10-27 ch 1, | abuseI really loved the fourth to last stanza, and also the second to last one. You said "sly" a lot, but after reading this through a couple of times, I decided it fit. It kind of just leads up to the ending, which is wonderful, as is the beginning. All I can think is "sly, sly, sly" I'm not sure if that is good or bad, but you definately did a great job. |