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jekodama
2008-01-27
ch 1,
abuseNice, but a bit clichéd in my honest opinion. I feel it's a tad void of emotion, and it doesn't flow easily. Again, beware of your use of punctuation marks, and I think it should be 'than' instead of 'then' in this sentence: "A sharper tongue then a brain"
Furusato
2007-11-03
ch 1,
abuseI love how it ended with hope at the end. :] Keep writing! n_n
sylvia's syndrome
2007-10-30
ch 1,
abuseWell, self-reflection is never easy so I applaud you for being brave enough to write this. However, I feel like you could say so much more than just these one-word lines. I think this could be improved if you delve deeper and go past these commonly used words. Keep writing!
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