There is a LOT happening. it was hard for me to keep up since I had to re-read a few sentences, and was immediately bombarded into this frantic scene. If you ever look back at this story in the future and wish to extend on it, could you add a bit more background on each of the characters? Other than that Les, you're story is entertaining. Let me know when you ever plan on updating it. :)

I liked this part:
"Russell expertly rolled two cigarettes and lit them both."

Yes, I remember those days, LOL

-onyxprop