I like the format. I think the second stanza is the strongest, and the first line really drew me into the poem.

love it.

Great poem.

Twilight Starr

nice wrok. keep writing

I liked this starting out, as I can emotionally relate to the first four lines, but then you kinda lost me with the metaphors here. it's nicely done, I just got confused as to where you were going with this.