Beautifully written piece. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have an excellent day.

Twilight Starr

nice work. keep writing

wow. just simply..wow./ this is one of the most amazing and emotionally felt things I've read of yours. it's poetic, and yet it doesn't want to be such a way anymore.

I love the 2nd to last line:

"And as she chokes on glass fragments from the falling of the sky, she mutters out a copper-scented overdue…."

Very compelling, powerful line. Great work.

And might I just say that I love that OneRepublic song in your profile. GREAT taste.

Breathtaking.