 Alteng 2007-12-14 . chapter 1I just got my wonderful flame from Don Juan Banana. So, I thought I would go over an check out the reviews he got on his stories and see what he said about the other folk. His flames were way out there.
Anyway, to your story. Indeed this was a creepy little thing. I think we are all a little afraid of the magic in a ouija board. Never did one myself.
You were able to convey the gore without going over the top as well. I have problems with that myself.
Somehow, I think her friends would have acted a little differently at her death. But, that is a basis of my own reaction.
The parting line on the story was cool though. THe ouija board had the last laugh.
One grammar comment, you used the wrong site here on the last paragraph. I guess it could work, but I think that sight would work better, since it does seem to be more of a visual thing. |