Squishies huh? Who knows, it might just catch on eventually. Good chapter. Kdh.

I liked the new chapter a lot!! I like the dragon already :) Just a thought though, it seems kinda odd that the princesses names are (for lack of better word) different from average names, yet the dragon is called George and his brother is called Theodore. Sorry if that last part didn't make whole lot of sense and its not like it really matters, just to think about it.

Not bad, not bad. Looking forward to the next chapter. Kdh.

Hahaha! George the dragon, that was golden. I very much like this work, interesting way to twist an old fairy tale into an amusing writing. I'll definitely enjoy reading this further. Good work, I'll be waiting for the next chapters.

I like the innovation behind this story, and the sharp straightforward writing style. Very well done!

Haha, I like the humor. Sharp writing but I dont think there's a real need to explain how the kingdoms names are pronounced, unless that was a part of the humor too. If it is, I didn't catch it. Good work, I'm going to head onto the next chapter to see how it continues.

I think this has a good start, but it would be nice for the action to get really started!! Will we get to see what happens to Silje?? Not that it really matters, but i just want to see if Silje has a purpose besides the kingdom competition

hey I love these kinds of stories and I love how you put some of your own stuff into the story. Keep writing! :)

I find the introduction part in which the both country compete with each other...is a bit lame.

How is it possible for the king of a country to fight for such little aspects such as how fair is their own daughter is, intelligence, and etc?

I mean it doesn't make sense to me. But never mind, that's just your style, I guess.

Just like a portion of the author in fictionpress, you need better paragraphing.

Your story relied too heavily on narration note, and with such a huge chunk of words, readers might fall asleep as a result of that.

Maybe you could exclude the details of each tower, and disclose as little information as possible to the reader. (leaving them guessing, duh!) And then go into details when the 'knight' actually pay visit to the tower, giving out the information through his point of view. That's indirect characterization.

Two points from it. It reduces narration notes and give rise to more dialogs.

Okay, so let me go into chapter 2~

Minor plot holes.

Tilde spat the sleeping potion back into its bottle, but I guess the leftover in her mouth (which mixed with her saliva) could've take effect and forcefully send her into sleep? For the exception the content of the potion is mild and there's nothing to bother. Maybe she should rinse her mouth or something. Haha.

Next. You mentioned in the previous chapter the potion grants her the ability of no need to take in any foods or drinks for 5 years. Since now she didn't consume the potion, she's perfectly normally and will need to eat and drink. I hope you won't ignore this fact in future chapter. This serve as a reminder though, lol.

I think I'm quite long-winded, huh?

So for conclusion, work out with your paragraphing and narration note if possible.

If the whole story is going to be told through narration note, why don't you narrate and record them down, upload to somewhere and give us the link to have it downloaded?

Nah, I'm just joking! Have fun yeh! This is what I'm going to say as for now.

An interesting start, I'll be keeping an eye on it. Kdh.