Reviews for you are not an addiction, your an addition

Reviews For: you are not an addiction, your an addition

Faith Adeline 2007-10-29 ch 1,	abuseI like it. Even when you're on a coke binge, you're a good poet. Great description, good poem. Keep it up. Faith
creepy kiss on tuesday 2007-10-29 ch 1,	abusegood coke binge. not lovely coke binge, but good coke binge.
by His blood 2007-10-29 ch 1,	abusewhen i'm emotionally ** up, i can barely get out two words, and you wrote this while high. it just makes me wish i could write like this anymore. but enough twisted jealousy. this is gorgeous, as always, and i love it. 'i dig my nails into your november-sunburnt shoulders' -- for some reason i like the image of 'november-burnt' better, but the line is still beautiful. 'and leave flakes of green nail polish in the bruises i press into your upper arms' -- beauty and violence, and it's so raw and so gorgeous and you write it so well. 'i memorize: / the hollows of your cheekbones' -- the format is flawless, and i love this line. '& the calluses on your feet' -- the poem would probably flow better and have a stronger effect if you deleted the line 'you have long toes, i tease you mercilessly.' the feeling and rhythm of it just doesn't seem to fit. i like the word 'mercilessly' there, the image it sets up, it seems to belong with the rest of the poem. 'you tell me stories about happy endings when i ask you for lies' -- brilliant(ly) broken beautiful, and i love it. 'and you wear complexes like piercings and me,' -- absolutely gorgeous. so much beauty in this, so raw and powerful and just perfect. '(lover/love (h) er)' -- the format is amazing, and the meaning is incredible. 'you wear [them?] like the Mozart you're pretending to like / and we scream,' -- amazing. 'tired of drawing misery on our feet with worn-out tattoo guns' -- absolutely amazing -- i love it. and the ending -- 'we scream.' so powerful, so brilliant and so incredible. except for that one line and a bit of awkward placements, this is absolutely flawless. it's still gorgeousbeautiful, and i love it, just like i adore everything you write. stay strong. [and stay careful.] alison .

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