what how why when, o.k o.k what's happening to her, how can she even remember her own name, why doesn't she have a private part, and when is she soposed to turn into a freak with no hair.
please I need to read more please how can you people keep folks in suspence like this I mean were is the girl vergina, let me gess next her ** will be gone?

This story is pretty confusing. everything happens really fast so you're like, "Woah, what just happened?" you also have a lot of spelling errors that kinda take away from you're story. also, jsut so you know, i run track on my high school team, and a 9:30 is considered to be a really slow time, the highest time a girl has run on my team is a 6:30. i just thought i should let you know. the plot is good, it's just really confusing.

MK: Nic please, for all our sakes, I beg you, put that candy away.

MDM: hum…. O_o

MK: And Ele, I don’t know how to describe this to you but MDM’s head isn’t exactly attached to his body, it kind of hovers over it. Plus I do not know what place sells leashes small enough for a 6 inch critter.

MDM: (is sneaking towards an unsuspecting Nick)

MK: Talking about size guys, this chapter is really small too. I was so excited about the alert I got in my email only to find that you had added the minuscule amount of 750 new words to your story. Yes I counted guys...

MDM: O_o (eyes still on the candy in Nic's hand)

MK: Oh well at least I got to find out more about the gargoyles. I keep imagining the old tree from Pocahontas as the one you described but since that tree was in America (a much wormer climate) I guess it would be more like one of the trees in the Lord of the Rings movie…Nic you should watch out for MDM. He doesn’t just chew on gargoyles.

MDM: …chocolate ^_^ (is in the process of crawling up Nic’s leg)

MK: (pulling out a hand full of gummy worms and a box of nerds) You, Nic are so lucky I just got a basket full of candy for my Birthday. Ew. MDM don’t eat me eat the candy.

MDM: um……

MK: Well till next time my friends, good writing.

MK: PS…I am jealous of Klara. I miss the snow

MDM: Candy, candy, candy candy...

MK: We're back for another review.

MDM: Gargoyles hard like Candy. Bemay they taste like blue raspberry!

MDM: Kla, do me a favor and make sure you don't let any of your Gargoyles near MDM. I would not like to see him get squished because some Gargoyle doesn't enjoy being gnawed on. Though your guys don't seem too scary…yet.

MDM. Scary! O_o

MK: MDM get out of my shirt. No you may not hide in my pocket.

MDM: Scary Candy!

MK: whatever. As I was ganna say Kla, I think I'll start caring a journal around with me so that I can write things down. That way I wont forget things. Thanks for the idea.

MDM: ...Candy?


MK: Till next time guys...Good Writing to You and Yours.

nice story
update soon

hey i think your story could use more description of whats happening on her world or how much time is passing, cause its not very clear, i also think longer chapter would do the trick very nicely.
well, whatever you decide, i'll be waiting for your next update!!hope you get inspired!!

really interesting story. It different, which is a fact that I really like. great work

MK: Hello Rio, Tab, Nic, and Ele

MDM: Me too is say yellow, hehe O_o

MK: We, MDM and I, just wanted to say great story...so far.

MDM: greatest good story...o candy...need sugar

MK: Anyway...just wanted to say keep up the good work and please...PLEASE update ASAP. MDM is not very good at waiting. It kinda goes crazy when good stories like yours sit around with only a prologue.

MDM: M...candy SO GOOD. Not end story, BAD!

MK: MDM behave. Ew, get off my shoulder with those sticky hands. Please don’t mind MDM. Having a shoulder angel...or what ever it is...an't as cool as you may think. The money I have to spend on candy... Please just update the story. I will try and contain MDM as long as I can.

MK: Bye

MDM: O_0 Buy? Buy CANDY!

MK: Oh God.

great prologue

Hey, sound good!! so when is the next update?