 aslans-sword 2007-10-30 . chapter 1Incredibly unique. It's too bad the X shaped thing didn't work out, it would have been a very interesting way to read it. Still, even in its current format, it makes sense. I like the lines on the left side of the poem. Even though every line has just one word, the choice of the words and the way you present them gave it real meaning. Nice work. |
 Teao Girl 2007-10-30 . chapter 1I like the way that this can be read as two seperate poems, or as a whole, and make sense in both ways. The red imagery was also nice, red big the colour of passion rather than romance, and also of blood, which ties in well with 'Conquer' and 'Savage'. Very nice, I'm sure it would have been even better in original formatting! |