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| Proof Of Existence 2007-12-02 ch 4,  | abuseKonnichiwa, Rai-chan, The story is pretty good. I like it. But, I agree with Goongala. You need to add something to signify changes in the lead character at that time. Again, other than that, I like. -Axel |
| SpiritOfDark 2007-11-11 ch 2, | abuseHey Rai! I really like it, but as a suggestion to the character changes, try putting some king of a mark, such as a line, or a dash, or some other symbol to separate! It would make it so much easier to read! Other than that, i really like it. Update soon! -Goongala! |
| Uchiha Whore 2007-11-03 ch 2, anon. | abuseHey! Awesome story keep up the good work.. Loved the first part in chapter one 'Lets Elope'. Im like :o, Cheers UW |