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| DStone39 2008-08-30 ch 8,  | abuseOoh, you got me hooked now... This is definitely interesting, especially how Carla is going to react to the news... Alert'd. Hope you aren't too busy to no update, I'm interested on how this will play on! |
| misery sister 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseYou have no jarring mistakes in grammar, punctuation, etc. But the beginning didn't really grab my attention. So I think, you have the style, but you're lacking in substance. Good luck. |
| snowangel55 2008-04-14 ch 8, | abuseWONDERFUL~...ok now i sound like a *teacher*! well zat was GREAT make more chapters as soon as possible! PLLZ |
| precious-memories 2008-04-12 ch 8, | abuseaw, lol hes gonna say it! yay, i bet carla will ruin it thought =[ anyways great chapter update soon! |
| singing gravity away 2008-04-12 ch 8, | abuseThanks for the update... and mentioning me! I hope the next chapter is posted soon! Justin and Bethany are so cute... |
| Fariy Lights 2008-04-12 ch 8, | abuseYey! That was pretty fast. ^_^ I liked the not-so-many change you did with the POVs. I think it flowed a bit better. :) And, haha. I love Justin. He's funny. |
| snowangel55 2008-04-08 ch 7, | abuseI donno wat i am supposed to write in these "reviews" but i am just tellin u THEY'RE ALL SO GOD! |
| snowangel55 2008-04-08 ch 4, | abuseWonder wat'll happen now!?:D |
| snowangel55 2008-04-08 ch 3, | abuseWOww Mya, u can quite come up with some stories, but still iz so interesting when u get to chapter 9(which i hope u will do) TELL ME |
| snowangel55 2008-04-08 ch 2, | abuseTHIS IS SO INTERESTING...wonder what she is goin to say!! |
| snowangel55 2008-04-08 ch 1, | abuseNICE CHAPTER--i just registered to eview ur stories |
| singing gravity away 2008-03-28 ch 7, | abuseThis story is great! I actually find myself laughing out loud! Update soon! Oh and this may sound really dumb but I can't find your 'homepage' or whatever to look at the character pics. |
| darkgurl92 2008-03-28 ch 7, | abusenot liking carla...update soon...kiss son...bethany n justin.. |
| Fariy Lights 2008-03-28 ch 7, | abuseYeah, I feel loved. :) Good chapter, as a whole. I liked how you made them thinking pretty much the same thing, with the 'long night' part at the end. The only thing that I would suggest, would be to put a bit more of details in the story. It helps to paint the picture a bit better, and lets you have more control over the story as a whole. And, I'd not switch POVs so much, but that's just me I guess. Much love, Fariy Lights |
| sew.what32 2008-02-23 ch 1, | abusei like chapter 1 so far!! i hope that Eric tells Bell that he is in love with her.. oh so romantic!! lol well anyway great job!! |