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| Edgar Wellington 2008-02-21 ch 1,  | abuseI am tempted to interpret this in a sexual way, as in holiday fears are of being raped, but I don't believe this was intended. This interpretation might be allegorical for a wider sense of intrusion. The protagonist is worried about their space and mind being "raped". And by people who operate under the pretense of safe loving family. I like this theme. And in a sense you carry it off quite well. But there is something missing. Hm. Maybe the poem is too abstract, not enough direct experience expressed -- though "Family Matters," the favorite quote, is a good reference. Maybe the poem is a touch cliche. Anyway, in general I like the poem. I wish I could make my expressions as coherent. I like the rhythm of the poem too, with the one word lines and the longer line explanations. I think I'll go have a look at more of your poems. |
| ignominy 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseas i read it i thought... amazing, beautiful, the words are so powerful, so true... but then the end weakened. those last three lines just didnt strike me like the rest of the poem did... "Holidays come./And I wish I could go."... I dont know, its just not quite as heart wrenching. It doesnt have the same pattern the rest of it does. "Release./Forever." as oposed to "Ravaged./Violated." the words arent as potent, not as commanding. they dont sieze your mind. i love it til the very end,then i only like it. kind of like christmas. |
| 97thparis 2007-11-02 ch 1, | abusecreative..i see some unspoken fears in here and as a wise english teacher once said, "You can always figure out some type of emotion with the author through their crazy poems." |