wow. this is one powerful piece. lots of built up anger an pain shows through in it. very powerful. keep writing.

-lost

I didn't like this one a whole lot Mob. It was too graphic and I think you personally do better without graphic violence-just judging from your past works. =S
Keep writing Mob, you're a great writer. This piece though, I think, wasn't your absolute best.

-Irony

Wa, I can't say I enjoyed this one - it was way too graphic and I have a weak stomach for this kind of stuff.

I noticed your mention of schizophrenia. This isn't an illness where you have different personalities, rather, the split occurs between the person with schizophrenia and reality. If you're referring to someone who perceives themselves to have six personalities or something, that's multiple personality disorder.

Sorry to be a know it all,

Bread.