Reviews for Challenge Twenty Nine

Reviews For: Challenge Twenty Nine - Reviews: Page 1 of 3

Catseye*Rose 2007-12-01 ch 1,	abuseMechanics: Washi Chiisai Originality: Chiomi Best: Ranwen I didn't have time to leave individual reviews, but I enjoyed them all ^_^ Good job, everyone!
Stormie 2007-12-01 ch 7, anon.	abuseIs it just me, or is there a "firefly" trend to these pieces : ) Best: Blackcat Originality: Ranwen Mechanics: Wasshi Chisai
Ylae 2007-12-01 ch 7, anon.	abuseMechanics: Ranwen Originality: Washi Chiisai Best: Chiomi
Tronion 2007-11-30 ch 1,	abuseTronion's vote: Mechanics - Ranwen Originality - Chiomi Best - Chiomi
snowingice (Damien Rubin) 2007-11-30 ch 1, anon.	abuseBest: Shard Originality: Washi Chiisai Mechanics: Ranwen
Washi Chiisai 2007-11-26 ch 1,	abuseKay, I've noticed that it isn't exactly common practice to reply to comments on chapters, but I wanted to anyway. Chiomi: Yeah, Kameron does. Not sure why, yet, but she does XD Thanks! Elizabeth Anne Ensley: Originally it actually wasn't going to be. But after reading all the comments on it, I think I'm going to develop this into a larger work. :) Probably an internet-only work, but a longer work regardless. Shard-Elyss: Kay, taking yours in parts. 1. Heh, guess that's an idiom that I didn't realize was an idiom. When I said that Kam flipped off the loudspeaker I meant that she "flipped the bird" - I don't know any other ways to say that. 2. Yeah, the lots-of-people-talking was ... confusing. It was confusing to me when I was editing it. :/ I need to go through and fix them. Sorry for the confusion there ... :( 3. I realized after I took some time away from the story, and then reread it (after I had submitted it, unfortunately) that I didn't give enough description/buildup of the characters. A large part of that, however, was my attempt to keep the submission short. Myriad: Thank you :) I know that there is very much lacking in this, sadly. I'm going to work on more of it, however, and hopefully develop this into an actual story, not just random writing. henred5: Thank you! :D I'm glad to hear that you liked it :) Monev11235: Yeah ... it was rather character flood. Again, I tried to keep this short, and I feel bad now that the characters had little-to-no depth. :( Thank you to everyone who commented on my submission :) I am very grateful to have feedback on this stuff :)
Lenari Soto 2007-11-25 ch 7,	abuseIn a little note to Henred before I get down to business: I liked your piece very much, but there were a few problems concerning mechanics that distracted me from the overall flow of the story. Other than that, good job. Alright, so... voting. Heh. I've been considering this for a while, as I loved Ranwen's piece a lot but as far as I can tell it doesn't have all the required elements of the challenge... which is possibly a deal breaker. If it's not, these are my picks: Mechanics- Ranwen Originality- Chiomi Best- BlackCat If it is, then please let me know and I shall review my voting.
Lenari Soto 2007-11-25 ch 6,	abuseI loved this quite a bit... maybe it's the fact that I use one of my friend's characters who is also named Blaze, but I really loved this Blaze and the way he related to Lynn. I'd love to see more of this... great job!
Lenari Soto 2007-11-25 ch 5,	abuseThe flow and mechanics were excellent, but that's not really what I want to say. What I want to say is that you captured emotions perfectly, and I'm... gah! I can't match with praise what you've just made me feel. And it's a great feat indeed because, even though I'm very emotional to begin with, she and I really have nothing in common. And managing to make people identify with a character they've nothing in common with is truly amazing.
Lenari Soto 2007-11-25 ch 2,	abuseI'm really interested in this! Excellent use of concepts and very great detail... I like that it's possible to relate to the characters already even in a short piece.
Monev11235 2007-11-25 ch 1,	abuseBest: Chiomi Originality: Washi Chiisai Mechanics: Ranwen
Monev11235 2007-11-25 ch 3,	abuseGood, but looks like another case of character flood without enough space to give them depth.
Monev11235 2007-11-25 ch 2,	abuseInteresting, me likey. As has been started, there isn't really enough space to develop any of the characters, and when Ganner gets brought in there's a bit of character flood. Better to introduce a couple of them at a time. Using poker to test for precognition is awesomesauce though.
Jane Ellecot 2007-11-24 ch 1,	abuseSome pretty interesting stories out there this time guys! Here are my votes for this month: Best! Chiomi Original! Shard Mechanics! Ranwen Can't wait to see the next set of stories :)
henred5 2007-11-24 ch 3,	abuseAwesome story piece here, loved it! It sounds well written and thoughts about, I just hope more is written. Names osund quite original and the ending leaves me wantign to read more.

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