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| g-dais 2008-05-28 ch 3,  | abusewoh~. the story was good. onlii three chapters, cant wait till the next glad to hab read it =] |
| figmentation 2008-02-18 ch 3, | abuseFirst of all, I love the first paragraph of this chapter because I can empathise with it so much. I liked the beginning although I have to admit, him kissing her was a little out of the blue. I'd almost (almost) prefer it if he spontaneously kissed her after saving her but then it might screw with your story. Also, while your descriptions give us a clear picture of the characters they are a little stilted and very "telling", perhaps look at giving us the descriptions in action or staggering their release almost? Aside from that though, I liked your intro and I like where this is headed. figmentation |
| HGiel 2008-01-29 ch 3, | abuseGood story ^^ Its funny and fun to read. You did a good job. |
| lilhelplessaznwithabigheart 2008-01-21 ch 3, | abusenice...whats gonna happen next *smirks-dont mind me...feeling lively today* |
| pretitiful 2008-01-20 ch 1, | abuseit's god !! haha pretty funny too. update soon mate :) |
| Logic Escapes Me 2008-01-18 ch 3, | abuseI really like the story. When are you going to write Chapter 4? I can't wait to see how this goes. ~Brit~ |
| WhenItRains 2008-01-11 ch 3, | abuseThis is so funny! I love it and I can't wait to read more! |
| LiME-GREEN-CAPES 2008-01-01 ch 3, | abusei like it, update soon! |
| Lost.In.A.World. 2007-12-30 ch 3, | abuseAhh cliffhanger! It wasn't bad at all, this was my favorite chapter so far :) |
| Sydney-J 14 2007-12-29 ch 3, | abuseI think the chapters fine cant wait till the next chapter to see what happens lol, i can understand when you have someone whos smart with no common sence - one of my friends is like that and shes blonde which doesnt help with her image either but we dont have groups at my school coz were british |
| BlackDragon of F1R3 2007-12-29 ch 3, | abuseWhy must everything end with a cliff hanger! MORE mORE MORE! It's really good so far. Write more soon please. |
| LeticiaTokioHotel 2007-12-29 ch 3, | abuseBad? I like the way the story goes :) Yeah! I'd like to see what happens to Riley next! Update a.s.a.p.! |
| not.a.spoiled.brat 2007-12-28 ch 3, | abusewell im happy with the way u wrote the last chapters and this one. u got to update soon. oh by the way.what grade are they suppose to be in?? |
| Anonymous D. Disclosure 2007-12-28 ch 3, | abusesoudns pretty interesting so far . . . can't wait for yout o update!! though . . . i swear u said int eh previous chapter that the guy had dark hair and in this chapter u said he was blond. which one is it? |
| LiME-GREEN-CAPES 2007-12-18 ch 2, | abuselol, i like the main character :] i really like this, please update soon! |