| Reviews for masochistic oblivion |
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Ev'rybody'sGotALaughin'Place 5/9/11 . chapter 1:( aww so sad |
mmmmmmmm 11/21/07 . chapter 1somehow that random number in the beginning, 257- it makes it feel real. and I like the inclusion of 'ONE heart' (caps are mine) since it repeats the numbers thing. I also love that chain [7-11 and so on) for basically the same reason. and the last two lines (I think may not have worked in another poem since they do sorta border on overused) I also liked. I'm not sure why the context makes so much difference, but it does. the only criticism I have is, I'm not sure I like the transition from the subject of 'you' - 'I' about halfway through. infact I like the 'you' best of all, it'd be interesting to see it with a consistent subject if that makes any sense :P very nice poem. good job :] |