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| master.of.all.evil 2008-09-03 ch 1,  | abusevery nice ;p writing a oneshot on how someone became a vampire=] clever |
| L3G3nD 2008-03-17 ch 1, | abusehaha good use of 1st person narration, good work! and you should write more, haha! happy writing anyway! |
| whonow 2007-11-03 ch 1, | abuseCool. :3 I like the voice you gave the MC. The way you vary sentence length and style is great. Nothing's bland here. I normally don't read this sort of thing -- and by 'normally' I mean 'almost never' -- so give yourself a pat on the back. You know you did well when you appeal to someone outside your target audience. Hehe. I especially like the bit where Roxanne reminisces about Marigold. Keep up the good work, eh? - Catfish |