very nice ;p

writing a oneshot on how someone became a vampire] clever

haha good use of 1st person narration, good work!

and you should write more, haha!

happy writing anyway!

Cool. :3 I like the voice you gave the MC. The way you vary sentence length and style is great. Nothing's bland here. I normally don't read this sort of thing - and by 'normally' I mean 'almost never' - so give yourself a pat on the back. You know you did well when you appeal to someone outside your target audience. Hehe.

I especially like the bit where Roxanne reminisces about Marigold. Keep up the good work, eh?

- Catfish