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| Greatheart 2008-04-18 ch 1,  | abuseNice little one-shot. My only suggestions is to go over your comma usage. I found a few places where an added comma would help the pacing of your sentences. Also, your zombie image is a bit cliche. Try considering how to re-imagine it to make it more original. |
| Alpha de la Omega 2007-11-09 ch 1, | abuseNow this is interesting and you have caught my attention. Please continue. :) |
| vogueantichrist 2007-11-04 ch 1, | abuseinteresting, i'd like to read more! |