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| bleepbloopbanana 2007-11-13 ch 1,  | abuseFirst of all... I love where this is going. Second of all... I'm shocked that this doesn't have more reviews. Third of all... TELL ME you haven't abandoned Undead Alive! And, um, Paisley? Eternal love. Just, yeah. Now, onto the critique! I think the only that thing that actually bugged me about this chapter was the (I think) slightly excessive use of italics. Oh, and "“all attention is good attention”" I think is supposed to be "any attention is good attention". That's about all, methinks. I'm HOPING you're continue this (and Undead Alive too! Pweease? For me?) Love love love, Bleep |