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RB360 2008-09-21 ch 5,	abuseYep, very action packed. Very brutal too, if do say so myself. It's interesting to see how many fighting styles there exist in the world. You really do know your martial arts. Keep it up.
Shiranui Akatsuki 2008-05-16 ch 5,	abuseOh, man. That was so cool. And I mean, really, really cool. I look forward to the next fights, but I do have one burning question in mind. How come a lot, almost half in fact, of the fighters are Japanese?
halfcrazy 2008-05-16 ch 4,	abuseInteresting story. I have to say that your knowledge concerning different forms of martial arts is quite impressive. You must've done some intensive research, no? I do have to point out one thing... It's spelled Filipino, not Philipino...
Asherah Seirei 2008-05-15 ch 1,	abuseOh, my gosh. Summary drew me, writing drew me--very interesting. I haven't read a truly original story on this site in a long while. =^^= Aurora is slightly extremely terrifying. XD She's got a bloodthirsty mind but then, don't we all? She proves that. Such an interesting concept, using martial arts for blood sport. This chapter just shows how companies will stop at nothing for a bit of advertisement. I DEFINITELY want to see where this is going. I hope to meet new characters. alert
Guardian's Light 2008-05-15 ch 5,	abuseExcellent chapter. Can't wait to read more.
Shiranui Akatsuki 2008-05-02 ch 4,	abuseYay! You're back! After reading the first chapter i thought I prefered the earlier version of Guilty Act, but after the Struggles arc, I'm not so sure any more. Still, it was fun to read Guilty Act with all the supernatural abilities. Even if it's a martial art story, the action has to be inevitably exaggerated. Using elemental powers added to the mysticism of the story. But it seems like there's more action and characterization than before, and my favorite character, Alex Garret seems to be more bad ** than before. Way to go, Alex! A few months ago, your story disappeared from my review history and I feared the worst - that you stopped altogether. Lucky I checked your account page after my overseas military training trip and found out you merely rewrote your story. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Spirit Tigress 2008-04-07 ch 4,	abuseCrap that match was fast! My bet's on Alex! ~Spirit Tigress
Spirit Tigress 2008-04-07 ch 3,	abuseAnother awesome chapter! Replace 'Onee-chan' and 'nee-chan' with 'Onii' and 'nii'. The former means older sister and the latter means older brother. ~Spirit Tigress
Spirit Tigress 2008-04-07 ch 2,	abuseAwesome! That's really all I can say right now! ~Spirit Tigress
Spirit Tigress 2008-04-03 ch 1,	abuse"Aurora licked her lips at his answer. “Wrong, Crocket. A blood sport is what this company will be doing for now on as its annual project.”" ~whoa...she makes me look sweet! I'll try to get to get to this again somethime this weekend. I didn't know there was an Ultimate Fighting Championship. (That was a name I had for one of the tournaments in a story I'm planning.) ~Spirit Tigress
SympleSymon 2008-02-27 ch 1,	abuseHey, sorry for the long delay in this return review for 'Battle Maverick'. So far, yeah, I can see where people are drawing the DBZ-slash-Battle-Royale comparisons, and that isn't altogether a bad thing. The set-up itself sounds promising, and I can just tell from the way that you're writing this now that the upcoming action is to be superb. A few things, though, but only for the Terms section; maybe you shouldn't bill the Foundation as a 'fictional' company? As, to met at least, it detracts from the story so much as to shatter the suspension of disbelief. We know it's not real, but telling us so is something different; people will react to something better if the author writes as if it's real all the time, not just during the prose. Also, it doesn't really help to have 'this is a fictional company' quickly followed by 'it was founded and developed by Maximus...' as that's almost a contradiction - if it's fictional, then you created it...see what I'm trying to say? Long thing short, maybe you should drop the fictional note. Otherwise, as great a start to a story as I have ever seen. ~SS
Bleu Ciel 2008-02-26 ch 1,	abuseI'd have to say, it's like a Dragonball Tournament aka Battle Royale... except maybe not as sick LOL The opening seemed a little cliche, but I'm guessing this is just the tip of the iceberg. You should also add "Actus Reus" to your terminology list. Sorry I only have time to review a chapter. I'm actually reviewing this at my work LOL I'll try to make for the next chapters next time (or tomorrow's work XD)
Soosie 2008-02-25 ch 4,	abusethat's really good! i really like it :D
scarletlady77 2008-02-22 ch 2,	abuseThis is a very interesting story. If you were going for descriptive, I'd say you nailed it. Excellent use of vocabulary. Though a few things (the G-string etc.) I think might best be left to imagination. That made me cringe, and stayed with me the rest of the chapter. Maybe I'm just too young to read it. So- is Aurora intended to be an anti-hero or a direct villain? Excellent writing- I plan to return and read more.
The Love Love Queen 2008-02-19 ch 4,	abuseSo far, Dj Midnight and Aurora are my favorite characters. I love how detailed this is. I can actually envision the whole thing in my mind. I also like that you explain certain terms at the end of the chapter. Keep up the good work. I can't wait for the next chapter.

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