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| SatyrsOfDoom 2008-06-21 ch 1,  | abuseVery interesting poem, also very original. I really liked it. |
| GilanSalehi 2007-11-04 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good poem, too. I like your poetry style: its got a some hints of Dr. Seuss with the rhyming patterns--really neat. The line where you say, "Others thought while watching birds," is a little odd to me, because that's not normally something I do every day. After reading "Books are written long with words," I was expecting a line more like: "Some are written, some are heard." You definitely kept the poem a little unpredictable, which is good because sometimes a poem can get boring if everything just comes as expected. Well done! |
| Barbados 2007-11-04 ch 1, | abuseThis was neat, I quite enjoyed it. Simple and charming. The line about the birds feels a little out of place to me, but it's so hard to CC poetry because it's a unique vision of the author, and everyone will see something different in it. There is a poem in my favorites that you might enjoy by another author on FP. You should check it out. |