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| sticks stones and TECHNO 2008-02-18 ch 33,  | abuseI absolutely love this. :) The style it's written in hooked me in instantly. |
| shy green rock 2008-01-07 ch 33, | abuseIt's written in a different style, which well is cool. I mean the chapters were short but sweet,down to the point ya know. |
| heartfeltlove 2008-01-05 ch 2, | abuseShe broke rule number one... This seems intresting! |
| entirely anonymous 2007-12-24 ch 19, | abuse"made me come back: to reality, at the very least." "made me come back to reality, at the very least." or "come back... to reality" |
| entirely anonymous 2007-12-24 ch 17, | abuse"Now don’t get the wrong impression: I love my mom." should be "Now don’t get the wrong impression; I love my mom." |
| entirely anonymous 2007-12-24 ch 13, | abuse"You stood up, then sitting down right next to me, stretching your legs out." That doesn't work... "sat down" or "and stretching" would, though.. Still like it, but a moderate amount of typos, so you just wanna watch that. |
| entirely anonymous 2007-12-24 ch 3, | abuseCouple spelling errors, here. Otherwise, this is really neat. I love how you're doing it. [= |
| entirely anonymous 2007-12-24 ch 1, | abuseNo clue where this is going, but I love what you've come up with in this chapter. |
| SaraBeara 2007-11-12 ch 33, anon. | abusei really love how this is written. almost like a poem of sorts. awesome story! :] |
| darkangel402 2007-11-09 ch 31, | abuseI really really like it!! I hope you update soon!! Even though the chapters are really short, they're really interesting and actually make the reader understand what is going on...yeah... :) Can't wait to read what happens next!! |
| HeavenHelpMe05 2007-11-08 ch 31, anon. | abuseit's really good. like ur really there. |
| Avery-102 2007-11-08 ch 31, | abuseINSTANT LOVE IN A STORY.Update soon. It's so cute. -Avery |
| it's not your fault 2007-11-04 ch 12, | abusei really really really like this. keep writing, and keep updating. |