I absolutely love this. :)

The style it's written in hooked me in instantly.

It's written in a different style, which well is cool. I mean the chapters were short but sweet,down to the point ya know.

She broke rule number one...

This seems intresting!

"made me come back: to reality, at the very least."

"made me come back to reality, at the very least."

or

"come back... to reality"

"Now don’t get the wrong impression: I love my mom."

should be

"Now don’t get the wrong impression; I love my mom."

"You stood up, then sitting down right next to me, stretching your legs out."

That doesn't work... "sat down" or "and stretching" would, though..

Still like it, but a moderate amount of typos, so you just wanna watch that.

Couple spelling errors, here. Otherwise, this is really neat. I love how you're doing it. [

No clue where this is going, but I love what you've come up with in this chapter.

i really love how this is written. almost like a poem of sorts. awesome story!

:]

I really really like it!

I hope you update soon!

Even though the chapters are really short, they're really interesting and actually make the reader understand what is going on...yeah... :)

Can't wait to read what happens next!

it's really good. like ur really there.

INSTANT LOVE IN A soon. It's so cute.

-Avery

i really really really like this. keep writing, and keep updating.