I am in love with this story. The characterization is great, the plot is great, the style is great... it's just amazing. I love it.

But, I'm dying here. Because it only goes to chapter five and then it just cuts off and I want to know what happens next, but you haven't posted anything in like, two years, and I'm absolutely dying. I'm going to die because I don't know what happens.

And it's just so eloquent and beautiful, and I can't believe you wrote it for a NaNo because obviously the quantity is there, but so is the /quality/, aside from typos and such. And I know that for my first NaNo the quality was just /awful/. In fact, it hurts me to look at it. But anyway. I'm totally rambling on now, but I /really/ hope that you add more to this eventually.

Wow. That was amazing. One of the best I've read in a while.

But where's the rest..?

Eurgh. Burning flesh.
Just a thought, but perhaps if you had introduced Samuel in the previous chapter? Just so he wasn't just a name. Although by the end it was still powerful, it might have been worth chucking him in even just once or twice. But whatever.
My usual thing about getting slightly bogged down with repeating certain themes - but I know, its wordcount first!
Hope you finished, my dear. I'm sure you did. PLEASE LET ME BETA, IT'S DECEMBER NOW *chews at keyboard in desperation*
Congrats m'lovey. It's really good. Post the rest! Now! *poke*

Oh my... that was disturbingly (read "amazingly-written, although considerably...") graphic in its latter tone. Who, out of the admittedly-eerie village, would accuse Samuel of such a thing? Is it a character we have already met?

That last line of monologue sent a chill up my spine, a reaction I reserve only for the most emotive and thought-provoking of stories. You've done exceedingly brilliantly, Pyjamas.

Joey ~x~

Another amazing chapter! It's starting to make sense why Theode is kept hidden away after I read the bit about how twins were viewed.

The school stuff was very interesting as well as Tristor's thoughts lingering on Theode.

Keep up the great work and good luck on finishing your NaNo if you haven't already! :-D

Oh God. I'm almost crying. How could this happen. Damn the villagers. Damn them all. **. This is one of the most touching stories I have ever read. I actually ache for Tristor and he's not even real.

Very long indeed. I liked it though, it gave alot of information that really sets up the story. Good job.

Great chapter! It was such a relief to see them meet.

Now it makes sense why Tristor's mother doesn't want him going near the barn. But how could a mother lock up her own son and keep him separated from the other son? Why would she do that?

I guess I must read on to learn more! With each mystery solved, another one appears...

This is an excellent story so far and I don't see any major errors popping up anywhere. Keep up the amazing work! :-D

*bounces up and down* kissy kissy kissy! ♥ I love it!!
You do tend to get a bit bogged down with repeating certain thoughts, like the "This can't be wrong" thing. But I'm allowed to say that cause I do it myself.
Whey! Keep going - you're almost there!
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Aww, that was... I mean... wow... I just... aww!

I HAD to read this chapter a few times because it made me feel all squeeish inside, which is one of the best ways to feel! I think it's incredibly sweet the way that not even the Gods can stop Tristor and Theode from each other, and I'm eagerly expecting the next chapter.

You've done brilliantly so far, Pyjamas.
Joey ~x~

There is something indescribable I love about this work, and I can't quite place it. The language is excellent, the plot line ensnaring, the characters believable, and the author dedicated. I struggled, and failed, to find any faults with this novel Pyjamas, and I've come to the conclusion that it is perfect.

Joey ~x~

P.S. You've perfectly described the way Tristor couldn't get Theode out of his mind, and I loved the way Theode just announced his feelings for Tristor.

Wow, this is very descriptive and informative. I feel as if I've gotten a real idea of the characters from just the bit of background you have given. I am eager to learn why Tristor isn't allowed near the barn. I loved the little piece about Brennan sneezing on him!

Anyways, keep up the great work! This is a very impressive beginning! :-D

~ BregoBeauty, from NaNoWriMo

That was one helluva chapter to read after a long week at college!

I didn't realise at all that Theode would never have seen his reflection, it just never occurred to me, but it makes so much sense!

The way that you've described the connection the the pair feel with one another was awe-inspiring, and it was so sincerely-expressed that I felt it immerse me in the plotline.

Ii honestly cannot wait until the next installment of this story, Pyjamas, because Ii know it shall be of the upmost quality.

Joey ~x~

This is really good. Despite knowing your intentions I liked the way that you managed to not give much away. But you just HAD to bring up Jeremy again didn't you... xD
My beta's fingers are itching though. Please let me loose on it next month! No offence, because there actually aren't many obvious errors at all, and I'm sure you can see those couple of typos.
The bit about Tristor having bug ears was a really good touch too. Made me snicker.
Wahey! I like I like. Keep going! You'll make it! Go go go!
Why are you still reading this review?! Go write!
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I liked it :)
Keep it up.