Very depressing, but also very good :) I like how you used repitition (especially baby, baby). Great job!
Sarah :) x
The Review Game

You're right- it is a little negative, but not too much. I didn't like that it was so short and also so repetitive. It just sounds like you slapped it together in a couple of minutes. I thought using the blue print as a comparison for reaching your goals was original though.